Saturday, May 3, 2014

Eight Sentences: Zeelia (16)

Mist rose from the saturated soil, further obscuring her position. Off in the distance frog-things croaked, bug-things chirruped or chittered. Then suddenly there was only the sound of the blood-warm rain pitter-patting into the fronds and leaves and soggy, boggy ground. They were close; really close. She froze, then caught herself and began to consciously relax her muscles like she had been taught; going rigid presented a more recognizable pattern than staying loose. Jarpha knew what to look for; they were old hands at this sort of thing. Their complacency was something that she might once again be able to turn to her advantage, that and the terrain. With a feral grin on her lips, she closed her eyes and let her senses extend freely into the undergrowth in search of her nearest possible opportunity for mischief.



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6 comments:

  1. What kind of mischief I wonder.

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    1. The kind that is better to give than receive...

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  2. From what I recall of earlier snippets, she was on the run before. Interesting that she's now bent on making trouble. I checked back and can see her switch in plans last week, I hope for her sake that she's aiming for something more life-saving than mere mischief!

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    1. She's pretty-much deep behind enemy lines, hunted and well out-numbered. Escape is very likely not going to be a linear thing. So she's turning things back upon her pursuers. By employing guerilla tactics she is aiming to make things messy, uncomfortable, costly and difficult for her opponents, which might open up fresh opportunities to either escape or to strike back in a meaningful way. In any case, it does beat letting them catch her...at least in her estimation.

      There's a lot to get across in only 8 sentences at a time...I'm considering expanding things out a bit past this arbitrary limitation. So far this has been a fun exercise/challenge to see how far I could get within 8 sentences at a time...but it might be time to give Zeelia a bit more breathing room...

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  3. The right kind of mischief could be life-saving.

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    1. Absolutely. Misbehavin' can be a very effective strategy. The Jarpha wouldn't expect her to go on the offensive--it would be ridiculous to them, since they obviously have an overwhelming superiority in terms of sheer numbers. They see her re-capture as a fore-gone conclusion, a trivial detail. One could compare the Jarpha officers as somewhat reminiscent of the complacent generals who continued to advocate for cavalry charges even after mechanized divisions had smashed their way across Europe in the Thirties. They've gotten stuck in a rut, over confident in their assessment of the situation, too reliant upon their standard operating procedures...

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