Saturday, April 12, 2014

Eight Sentences: Zeelia (13)

Light erupted thunderously behind her head. Again. Hammer-blow winds ripped at her back, tugged at her hands, threatened to dislodge her in mid-step. But she kept moving. Didn't fall. Didn't stop. She wasn't there to feel the third blast. She ran through red foliage for all she was worth.




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The Weekend Writing Warriors site sponsors a round of 8-sentence excerpts every weekend. Zeelia (1) was my first 8-sentence except and has become a regular weekly feature here at my blog. There is a new Linky-list at Weekend Writing Warriors for everyone participating in the blog-hop each weekend. Be sure to check out some of the other writers!

4 comments:

  1. Scary. Are the blasts of light someone shooting at her? She's such a toughie, I love her!

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    1. Explosions. She's high-tailing it out of the area right before things go BOOM! in a big way. She's tough, definitely...and sh'll need to be with what is ahead of her...

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  2. Plenty of action and tension in this scene. Good use of short sentences. Just a thought: I'd consider replacing at least one "was" in the last two sentences.

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    1. Thanks. Good call on the was/was ting--I changed it up a bit. I like shorter sentences, but sometimes things get a bit longer than I'd like, in order to stick to the 8-sentence limit. I'm considering re-writing things to break-up some of the longer sentences when things reach the point where it'll be worth collecting it all into an eBook or something.

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