Saturday, March 15, 2014

Eight Sentences: Zeelia (9)

Sputtering and blowing, she fought her way to the surface in a torrent of bubbles. The water was cold, her limbs stiff, the armor heavy, but she struggled her way back up to the air with implacable determination. She was on the verge of exhaustion, but there was no way she would give up now. Not now. No time to lose, she spotted some sort of pink and green smears off to one side, so she headed towards them. Half swimming, half floundering, she kept going until she was crawling and clawing her way through mud and finally she touched something almost solid. Darkness claimed her then. Surrounded by softly luminous fungi and a host of tiny white frogs that resumed their croaking chorus after the intruder had lain still for a few minutes.




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The Weekend Writing Warriors site sponsors a round of 8-sentence excerpts every weekend. Zeelia (1) was my first 8-sentence except and has become a regular weekly feature here at my blog. There is a new Linky-list at Weekend Writing Warriors for everyone participating in the blog-hop each weekend. Be sure to check out some of the other writers!

7 comments:

  1. Great job of conveying her fierce determination! Good descriptive writing! :-)

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    1. Thanks! We were out the door really early on Saturday and I missed the Linky List for this episode. Well, no more falling. We can go exploring next time.

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  2. Happy St Patricks Day. Millions of people around the world don their best attire to tell stories, sing songs and celibrate being green!

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    1. Happy St. Patrick's Day to you as well. I made corned beef and cabbage for my wife tonight.

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  3. Oh my. That was awesome. Great hook at the beginning, wonderful conflict, nicely tied up.

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    1. Thanks. I hope to work on a few new episodes later today.

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  4. Very dark and intriguing. Great post. Also, I tried to follow the blog but wasn't able to for some reason. I will try again next time :)

    www.anythingimagined.blogspot.com

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