Saturday, March 1, 2014

Eight Sentences: Zeelia (7)

A trickle of Blood ran down her cheek like a tear. She looked up at the gargantuan leaf overhead. The hole where she fell through. It would be a lot less work to just go to sleep here and now, next to the scummy pool. Ripples. Something moved in there. She had no interest in waiting around to see what lived in the water, so she got back onto her feet and picked a new direction. The soil thinned out the farther she moved from the pool; she never saw the edge of this leaf until she was tumbling down past it.




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The Weekend Writing Warriors site sponsors a round of 8-sentence excerpts every weekend. Zeelia (1) was my first 8-sentence except and has become a regular weekly feature here at my blog. There is a new Linky-list at Weekend Writing Warriors for everyone participating in the blog-hop each weekend. Be sure to check out some of the other writers!

14 comments:

  1. Wow, she's got troubles! The world she's in sounds enormous and rather uncertain. :-) Good world-building!

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    1. Thanks! This has been a lot of fun. I'm writing the next batch in the series and it really has taken on a life of its own. Glad you're enjoying it!

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  2. Wow, I am really wondering what sort of world this is and how she came to be in such a dangerous situation. Nice eight.

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    1. I will reveal more about the world, and her back-story as we go along, eight sentences at a time. I may have a prequel of sorts in the works as well. Thanks for dropping by and for the comment!

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  3. What a bummer. Sounds like she really needs to be paying attention to her surroundings.

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    1. Yeah, it has been a bit rough so far, but at least she has avoided the scalehounds and their handlers. That's gotta be worth something. So far she's been so caught-up in running away that she really has not paid much attention to her surroundings, so that is something that she may want to start doing, before things get even more out of hand...

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  4. I've just joined Weekend Writing Warriors so I don't know the background of this character. But I'm definitely curious! What kind of creature is she? Human? Fairy? What's her quest? Your excerpt made me want to know more.

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    1. So far all that we know is what has gone up in the weekly installments. We'll be finding out more as we go along. I'll post more details on the world, the characters, scalehounds, why she's running, etc. as things develop. For now, I can say that she is definitely human-descended, and that the entities pursuing her are decidedly less human than she is by a significant degree...

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  5. Definitely intriguing ... walking off leaves into pools. Certainly raises questions and offers the reader an interesting world. Nicely done.

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    1. Thanks. I'm looking forward to revealing more about this world--and this character--as things develop. I hope to do a few illustrations for this series in the near future as well.

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  6. This snippet certainly gets a reader curious. Her world sounds huge, an Alice in Wonderland-type place. I really like your descriptions to set up the scene.

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    1. I'm a big Alice in Wonderland fan, so your comment gave me a really big grin. Thanks! I'm enjoying working within the eight-sentence structure for these scenes. At first it was just going to be a single one-off teaser sort of thing, but it rapidly grew into a serial of sorts, all on its own. I'm just trying to keep up with it, stay out of the way and keep it going...

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  7. Interesting. A very dangerous world she's in apparently. I liked the tense style of the snippet!

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    1. I'm happy that you found this interesting. It's a very dangerous world indeed. The tense style is my attempt at adapting Lester Dent's master plot advice within the eight-sentence framework. things have just all come together really well for this serial that I didn't know I was going to be writing...

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