Saturday, March 22, 2014

Eight Sentences: Zeelia (10)

Minutes, hours, days; she had no idea how long she slept there in the mud. Her arms and legs ached, partly from the fall, mostly from the impact and the strain of fighting her way free of the water while wearing armor. The muck covering her and matting her hair was mostly dry. Perhaps it would prove good camouflage, despite the reek, though she had no illusions about eluding her pursuers. It would take more than a blind jump and a dizzying fall through an impossible rain forest to escape the ones hunting after her. If she were to get away, then she would need to make it more trouble than it was worth to continue pursuing her. So she took her time, like her instructors had constantly drilled into her during training, and carefully examined her surroundings while she quietly extricated her legs from the mud and picked a likely looking direction. When she was ready, she quickly made her way towards what looked like higher ground, it was time to see what she'd gotten herself into this time.




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The Weekend Writing Warriors site sponsors a round of 8-sentence excerpts every weekend. Zeelia (1) was my first 8-sentence except and has become a regular weekly feature here at my blog. There is a new Linky-list at Weekend Writing Warriors for everyone participating in the blog-hop each weekend. Be sure to check out some of the other writers!

6 comments:

  1. "...what she'd gotten herself into this time." Nice! She's an adventurous sort. Makes for good reading!

    Your snippet is full of great descriptive writing. I got a great visual while I read it--and I think I caught a whiff of pond mud. :-) Nicely done!

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    1. Thanks for the comment. It's wonderful to get some feedback and doubly-nice to see such positive encouragement. Thank you.

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  2. Oh boy, armor and water...that makes it tough to get around. I'm glad the water wasn't too deep, or she'd have been done for.

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    1. Yep. If the water had been a bit deeper, that might have been the end of the story right there. This time the risk she took paid off...at least so far...

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  3. At least she keeps her head and remembers what she was taught. A very resourceful heroine...intriguing snippet!

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    1. I like resourceful protagonists and I like to think of this character as being a competent hero, in an almost Campbellian way. To have escaped, stolen the armor, and gotten this far...that takes moxie and then some...
      Glad you enjoyed the snippet. This is an interesting process. I never thought that limiting things to eight sentences would be this much fun!

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