Tuesday, February 11, 2014

Trifecta: Week 102

This week's writing challenge at Trifecta was to write about love gone wrong in exactly 33 words, but not using the words love, sad, tears, wept, heart, or pain. below is my entry, written using Write-or-Die.
How'd I do?


Crisp. Clean. The air is sharp as knives. The waves crash like thunder through the rocks along the shore. It's a good place to be alone. To remember. To forget. But I can't.


15 comments:

  1. You did great :-) Classic show-not-tell.

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    1. Thanks! This was an interesting challenge--and a good way to try-out Write-or-Die again. I might just do this again...

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  2. Oh, I love your opening and your close. Great write and great to see you on Trifecta!

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  3. You knocked the socks off of 'sad'!

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  4. Yes, we try to run away from what occupies our minds, but wherever we go, there it is!

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  5. Last line genius award for the week!

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  6. I was there on that shore with you,

    Enjoyed

    Ally:)

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  7. Oh, I like the paradox of going to the place to forget and remember.

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  8. Oh, very well done. Atmospheric indeed. Thanks for sharing. Voting opens soon!

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  9. I could imagine myself on a lonely beach. Great work!

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  10. Such sadness ... you did great.

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  11. The scene wasn't hard to imagine, I could feel the breeze, the mist from the waves and the heartache. Well done!

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  12. I really felt the scene and the sadness. That last line packs a punch. So well done!

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  13. The air is sharp as knives. To remember. To forget. But I can't.

    Wow, like the other commenters, I felt like I was there - incredibly evocative.

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  14. The details were super. I could feel your presence in the writing and your voice. The message is oh, so sad. Not being able to control your thoughts, and isolation are both well presented.

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