Saturday, January 11, 2014

Eight Sentences: Zeelia (1)

Tears blurred everything, making the darkness doubly treacherous. Sweat almost cost her the sabre; her grip was growing weaker. Blood caked her hair, a soggy crust tugged each time she moved. Exhaustion was overtaking her faster than the scalehounds tracking her scent. Her hands shook too much to check on the gun. She forced herself to keep moving. It couldn't be too much farther, and if it was, then it would do her no good. It would all be over before it could really begin.





The Weekend Writing Warriors site sponsors a round of 8-sentence excerpts every weekend. This is my first one. I plan on making this a regular feature, if only to help build-up some more momentum with the writing. There is a Linky-list for everyone participating in the blog-hop this weekend. Check out some of the other writers!

13 comments:

  1. I really wonder in what kind of situation she is.

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    1. She's in trouble. We'll discover more as this goes along.

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  2. Hi and welcome to WeWriWa :-) You've got a suspenseful and kind of creepy excerpt here--what's chasing her, where's she going, what happened to wear her down so much? Hope you continue with this next week!

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    1. Hello, and thanks! I intend to continue, just to find out some of those very things...

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    1. Thanks. I'm looking forward to finding out more as things progress. With luck, I may have a second serial here...

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  4. Great description. (sorry if this appears multiple times. I'm having trouble logging in and not sure if it's working. )

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    1. No problem--we moderate all the comments due to the spammers we've had drop by in the recent past. I may just turn that off on Saturdays, to make it easier for people.

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  5. Intense snippet, great details...will be interesting to learn more.

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    1. Thanks. This will certainly continue. Wow--with all this great encouragement I'm going to make this an every Saturday thing for sure now!

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  6. Intense opening. Welcome to WeWriWa.

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    1. Thank you. We like spicy foods and intense fiction. Looking forward to reading more of everyone else's WeWriWa entries!

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